There he laid in front of everyone. Laying on the wooden basketball court. His right shin was poking out while his left leg was dropped to the grounds, his right leg was dangling from where his shin broke. The whole crowd gasped as they saw the horrible scene. The player who fell and broke his shin was screaming in pain. there was no blood dripping from his shin but it still was a shocking view to see. A few seconds after he dropped to the ground destroying his knee the medics came to help

May 9, 2016 at 4:14 pm
I love the title.
You’ve attempted to create quite a graphic scene, with the nnarrator addresing us. This works well but you must proof-read your work.
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